The Cliche of Love

I'm not so good at writing love poems
But here I go
Trying to show my emotions for you,
My love that I'm trying to show
the repetition in this stanza and the short second line kind of throw off the whole poem .

So suddenly everything changed
that day I met you <- add that between day and I
Not knowing what will happen
Not knowing what we would do

Um . When you're writting , you need to pay more attention to the flow . In most of your poems its kind of off .. Otherwise than what i mentioned , really good job . 4/5

This poem was good, I enjoyed the way that you even named the poem that which it is; a cliche.

I felt that at times the flow was taken away from. The poem itself was very good, but the flow and the over all rythme of the poem was sort of off kilter.

I think that you should watch one line over another.

I really felt that you put a lot of emotion into this and felt that it was really one of the best qualities that this poem has.

I enjoyed the read and I'm very glad to have read it.

P.s. I really like it.

:)

This reminds me of my boyfriend and I so long ago.... :(

It was good i really liked it

ok read my poems