Oh dear girl.. *hugs* The poem had so true feelings.. After having a heart smashed in wall...or feeling blue about life..where girls want to go? To home..in the childhood home...where everything is safe.. Escaping the present is causing you pain.

It takes so much time to fit in the new world. You have had to change your daily routines...and suddenly....these persons...who you are missing...the person in photos...are not there.

"Home is too far"...Mmmm... Well, try to make a home in the place you live. People should carry a home with them wherever they go, so they would never feel bad or lonely...

The poem has nice flow. I like it much. Reminds me about the time 5 years ago.. *smiling* I managed....I survived...alive.. Life is not easy but somehow manageable.. :)

Mom Dad... I feel like running back 2 u..

So wonderful thought...

Nice poem n I can relate to wat I wrote in d first sentence above in d comment..

Good talent... keep writing..

I love this one! I loved the first stanza. It sort of reminded me of a Hinder song (Better Than Me). You'll always need your parents, eh, even though you'll feel like you don't. lol

No matter how old one gets, you can still have that feeling of wishing someone - a parent - could make things all better again.

Ahhh, this is a sad poem, and I feel as though in some way I can relate to the idea of being backed into a corner and having no one to turn to but your parents (maybe not in a shelter sense, but ive been in the situation before).

Mechanically, well written, didn't see anything wrong with it. Loved the flow of the whole thing, seemed pretty quick if that makes any sense.

You're a very talented writer.

I want to just give you a hug and congratulate and praise you for reaching so deep inside and pulling this out to express these feelings.
Sadness compelled out the aching world one feels and the longing to escape this. It is hard when you feel alone, something I have been told is to open up and share this so others can help, be there for you and so you are not alone. you are brave, I admire you, also great rhyming in here, it gave off the smell of these feelings as it blew along in this consistent flow. 5/5 well done

What a very sad piece that brought tears to this readers eyes.

Staring at the photos,
Memories flash by,
Crouched in a corner,
Silently - I cry.

How often we look at old pictures and cry for those no longer near.

A convoluted maze
of a life so blue,
Where to go now,
I have no clue.

Sometimes the path we must take in life is a hard one. Findiing your place in life is like a maze. Great Imagery.

'Friends' are so mean,
Wearing a smiling shroud,
Daddy's pampered girl,
Is lost in the crowd.

We are in such a hurry to grow up and make it on our own. Then when the time finally comes. We want those comforts of home.

Home is too far,
Visits are only few,
Mom,Dad I feel like,
Running back to you.

This stanza really touched me. No matter how old we get. There are times when we all want to run back to the safty of Mom and Dad.

Great job!
(((hugs)))
Cindy

This is sad but sweet at the same time. Homesick is but a phase m'dear. take care! 5/5

-Liz-

It was pretty good poem i think this line should change
"Staring at the photos,
Memories flash by"
Flash should be flashing.
But it was really good love the stanzas!

This poem is really sweet, it's sad, but sweet in the end.

I don't really have anything bad to say about it except in the last line of the second stanza i think it could have been slightly longer to work better rhythm, and that this line 'Mom,Dad I feel like," should have a space between Mom, Dad.

xoxo -Lauren

Awww for a sad poem it has a cute ending! wish it was a little longer, but awesome job! :D

Very emotional indeed! a poem from utter loneliness I guess. Very well constructed. Good one!

Bt i jst wonder,,,what u do wen ur parents r turnin u into sumthin dark n blue,,,u dint had good frends,, or far dat matter even a shoulder where u can rest ur head jst for while seekin comfort,,,
in d end u realize ur all alone in dis wide world,,,,

Bt i jst wonder,,,wht u do wen ur parents r turnin u into sumthin dark n blue,,,u dint had good frends,, or far dat matter even a shoulder where u can rest ur head jst for while seekin comfort,,,
in d end u realize ur all alone in dis wide world,,,,