It was really good :) and thanks for commenting on mine :) 5/5

I think to me, it was a bit hard to read. Maybe put punctuation marks, or have your poem be in separte stanzas, so it isn't just like a few words in each line, but more than that. It will just make it more enjoyable to read, but I did like this poem.

A really good first poem, it really grips you and it's very fast paced.

However, i agree with 'singing in the rain', in places it was a bit hard to read.. maybe putting some puncuation would help?

Imi x

WOW
that poem gave me goosebumps
I could actually feel the arragant plesure
of the attacker. For your very first poem
you should be proud not many can preduce
such imagery on their first piece. (I for
instance was horrible my fist time) However
you need a slight bit of work on the flow
of your peice (then again I could of read
it wrong) good luck in the future and let
your poems inspire you.

:~)Sam(~: