Simple things

by emma   Jun 6, 2008


That feeling at the end of the day,
When I take my socks off,
It's the simple things I love,
Stretching out my toes on clean bed linen.

Or when I wake up in the morning,
And the light is lightest yellow,
Like it was painted on my face,
It's warming my soul and waking my mind.

And catching somebody's eye,
Someone you don't know,
But you know they're special,
And for a minute you two are somewhere else.

The nostalgia when I think,
Of my father, of me,
As a little girl and my innocence,
My last thought before I go to my bed.

okay so i know that this isn't the best poem... but i've only I've started writing, so please comment, rate and tell me what you think!
thank you!

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  • 16 years ago

    by real eyes realize real lies

    This is a nice poem good job!

  • 16 years ago

    by Spirit

    Thank you for the read

    you a new poet just starting to bloom
    and you shouldn't be worried about
    what people think of your poems dont
    ever say that you know the poem is'nt
    good because then you don't believe
    in your own words. again i think that
    you are a talented young poet and that
    you have a lot of potential.

    thanks again

    :~)Sam Mayo:~)

    Ps follow the words

  • 16 years ago

    by Finalgravedigger

    I liked your poems message about simple things, people tend to forget them. However i believe that you can develop some description and better transition so the reader wont get confused. But really your starting out way better than i did trust me.^^

  • 16 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This is really good, I liked how you were so descriptive, here is just a thought:

    "Or when I wake up in the morning,
    And the light is lightest yellow,"

    I think it would sound a bit better like this:

    "And the light is its brightest yellow,"

    Having the two lights in one line, kinda threw me off. Just my suggesstion, you don't have to change it if you don't want to. Take care! :)

  • 16 years ago

    by emma

    Oh crud thanks for pointing that out it did that with another poem.. i'll sort it out now!

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