This is so intense from the beginning to the end, one of the most powerful poems I've read in a while. I really can't fully describe how I feel right now- the emotions that you excellently expressed through each stanza are breathtaking and truly overwhelming. I like the way you wrote this- every line is so effective, with great choice of words and memorable atmosphere, haunting in a way. Also, the imagery unraveled with every word in the piece, creating so vivid images in my mind. The rhyme scheme and flow also seem flawless to me. I love your newer pieces, they're so original and heartfelt and this one is not an exception. I would maybe rearrange the structure of the poem a bit to create more captivating rhythm because some lines are quite longer than the others, but that's minor critique compared to this amazing piece. |
This poem reflects very intense emotion in a rare rhyme scheme well done. |
Lets see if I can give you any suggestions. Here we go. I'll try to be as detailed as possible. :] |
by NinjaGirl
An excellent piece of poetry. this is the first that i have read of yours, yet but i greatly enjoyed it. the description was amazing and the rhyme was magnificent. a brilliant flow to add. |