This one caught me a little off guard. Not what I had expected from reading other writes of yours.

However, it did hit a chord with me. I felt
boyish charm through your words ... seeking, wanting, afraid of rejection, yet still dreaming and yearning.

I stumbled once reading the first time, and again the second time. The last word of the first stanza throws it off for me. So in reading through it again, no pun intended, I changed the word "through" to "though" and it went smoother.

The last stanza? A major hit!

Aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaawwwwwwwwwwwww dis poem is so cool. keep it up

I really liked this poem it was easy to read and to understand. It was short, sweet and to the point. The rhyming was also great and helped keep the flow going nicely. 5/5

Short yet very good, a nice easy flow to follow and straight to the point. Great job =]

The poem had a very nice flow to it. I agree with Lost Soul.