I prefer this one to 'Deux' It's better scripted

First of all. HEY DUDE! Finally you got an account on this site after I told you lol.

"The sky is crying.
Rainbows are showing,
Red, yellow, blue and green."

I like your imagery here. You really are painting a picture of a rainbow for the readers to see.

"As you just sit there,
Not looking in my eyes
Not even listening to your own lies.
I thought you meant what you said, when you said
You loved me."

I like your rhyme scheme here. Its simple but it does the job correctly. And many people can relate to this part because most people have been through it which makes the poem a whole of a lot better than it already is.

"But now I just look at you holding hands with her and I now know you were false.
You will never know how many tears fell each night for you.
And how many maybes I thought about, because I thought maybe just maybe you might actually love me like I loved you one day. "

Again a few people can relate to this, I sort of can in a way slightly. but its a good poem. The flow was well written and over all a good read. Keep it up and post more of your stuff. Post the one we wrote together lol. "Smee" lol

First of all. HEY DUDE! Finally you got an account on this site after I told you lol.

"The sky is crying.
Rainbows are showing,
Red, yellow, blue and green."

I like your imagery here. You really are painting a picture of a rainbow for the readers to see.

"As you just sit there,
Not looking in my eyes
Not even listening to your own lies.
I thought you meant what you said, when you said
You loved me."

I like your rhyme scheme here. Its simple but it does the job correctly. And many people can relate to this part because most people have been through it which makes the poem a whole of a lot better than it already is.

"But now I just look at you holding hands with her and I now know you were false.
You will never know how many tears fell each night for you.
And how many maybes I thought about, because I thought maybe just maybe you might actually love me like I loved you one day. "

Again a few people can relate to this, I sort of can in a way slightly. but its a good poem. The flow was well written and over all a good read. Keep it up and post more of your stuff. Post the one we wrote together lol. "Smee" lol