Comments : An Unwanted Change

  • 16 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Okay, I'm reading this poem.. and I get through the first three stanzas, and I'm thinking perfect. :] She used the title awesome.. Then I get to the last stanza.. and I stopped and thought this just isn't worded right for me.

    "There's nothing else to do.
    You're not lost, you're found.
    But you're not the old you
    Perhaps just confound?"

    Grrr. I don't know what wrong with it. lol. But for some reason, I just don't like the wording. Possibly you could change it to something else? Actually, the wording is OK, but I got really confused for some reason. & I honestly don't know why. :\ Maybe it's supposed to be written this way? When you said.. "you're not lost, you're found." What? Maybe i'm the one not getting this. lol. But, that line threw me off. Because, this whole poem your talking about losing this one friend of yours, and now you're saying.. "you're not lost, you're found.".. Of course your talking about them, but .. You totally threw me off here. Maybe my whole mind isn't thinking right now. lol. But, I like the whole idea of the poem. It's probably just me! I've read a lot of poems lately! Sorry, if I'm making no sense at all. But, I'm still giving you a 5/5. :]

  • 16 years ago

    by Lisa

    Fading to nothing; just black.
    I miss the glow of your being.
    oh, will you please just come back?
    Now hate is what I'm seeing.

    Great job 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by H E Losey

    I was enjoying this read right up until the final stanza, then confusion overtook me ( yes, confounded). Or were you damning your old lover? No vote until clarified.
    As always an opinion.