Nice one...

keep it up

best wishz.. Karan

What a beautifuly sad piece you have penned. This brought the tears to my eyes. The imagery is fantastic.

Memories of yesteryears silently flash by,
Your absence is tormenting, in solitude I cry,
A game of Destiny, Cruel story it wrote,
You watching over me from the Heaven above.

The entire poem was great but this stanza was the one that touched me the most. Probably because I relate so much to your words.
Great job!
((hugs))
Cindy

Beautifully sad...love the flow and rhyme scheme...

It is a bit off in the last verse as the pattern of the first two verses is altered....

I love the dreamy visuals of the clouds and the banyon tree....remembering a lost love or a departed loved one....I can so relate to the feelings...

Wow very sad good work portraying your emotion.short but good.5/5

This is really good!!! its so sad, but its also really sweet.

There was so much imagery and it all really flowed together.

so...5/5 =)

Wow that was really good. So descriptive especially these lines...
"Sizzling Summer heat and the sky so blue,
Teasing billows form an image resembling you," Nice 5/5

This poem gives me the shivers.
It's so amazing for many reasons. I think perhaps the biggest reason it's remarkable is because it incorporates something beautiful (nature) into something dark and unknown (death). It's very suspenseful yet calming, and you don't actually know that this person died until the last line. The way you keep us guessing definetly leads to a more deep, thoughtful read.

The only thing I have to sort of pick on is this line:
"Sizzling Summer heat and the sky so blue,
Teasing billows form an image resembling you,"
Yes, it's a beautiful analogy and all, but the second line seems to sort of chop-up the flow a bit in the stanza. I'm not sure quite what you could do, but it's just a suggestion. Maybe even breaking resembling up into "that looks like". I know it's a longer phrase but it seems to flow a bit better. Just a suggestion.

Well thought out, congratulations and thanks for a splendid poem.

5/5
- Shanna

Reminiscing, wow i mostly hate it. I reminisce about happy times i misss. nice work

Wonderful job, I love the use of imagery and the word "Banyan", it makes the whole poem come alive.
~I see a lot of potential in you, take a look at famous poets like Whitman and Frost and if you're serious about becoming published, I think you have the ability to rise above the "rhyming society of this site" and become truly great. Try the site Poet Sanctuary. :) Keep it up

A very beautiful and amazing piece of poetry that i adored greatly. fantastic wording and brilliant description which painted a vivid picture in my mind. yeah, i have a weird mind :) .. when i got to the end, however, it felt like it wasn't quite finished. it may have ended a bit quick, but i think it was, altogether, an astounding piece. wonderful imagery.

5/5

Keep Writing, hun
As Always,
~NinjaGirl~

This poem is amazing.
It really hit close to home.
Thank you for sharing this.
Take care, and keep writing.

Sincerly, Sammie-Lee.

This poem is amazing.
It really hit close to home.
Thank you for sharing this.
Take care, and keep writing.

Sincerly, Sammie-Lee.

5/5

Thank you for the comment.

That aside I loved this poem. I could almost feel myself being there amidst the flowery night.

Well portrayed.

5/5