Well written my friend.simple yet powerful lines conveying a message full of pain.

The way you express your feelings amazing.
I like this also I have made one poem I am sending it to you Please read it
Suni raho mein.
Suna pan sa hai,
Tum bin,

Sune pan mein,
Ham gum se hai
Tum bin

Akho mein ek
Aas si hai ki,
Tum milo gai,
Har lamha
chubhta sa ha
Tum bin

Akho ko Talash hai
Jis chehre ki
Vo kahi gum sa hai
Tum bin

Intzar ki ghadiya
Kabhi lambi na hozayea
Vo aag nahi,
toh kal hi ah jaye

Amazing work.. i think you're really good! keep it up!

I have always admired your style of writing and this is just another one of your pieces of art :)

So much of emotions have gone through this piece. It's not only touchy but very tragic as well. I liked the way you've constructed the lines and expressed the feelings. One can feel the pain and despair very well. A wonderful write. Very well penned!