Accident or Murder?

by Courageous Dreamer   Jun 10, 2008


Cruising down the highway going sixty-five,
A troubled girl sat in the driver's seat of a Honda.
She had her friends along with her,
And they began smashing down liquor.

Her blood shot eyes glanced to the back seat quick,
She saw her friends sitting there laughing.
"Oh, shit" she muttered, "I'm beginning to swerve."
She slammed on the brakes, but little did she know,
It was a little too late.

The car slammed her forward as it went into the ditch,
Causing her to crash into the front window.

Shatter.
The sound of broken glass.

She lay passed out in the front seat of the car,
With blood streaming down her face.

The inside of the car was a shame to see.
Blood and liquor bottles scattered everywhere,
And girls and boys laying there under the influence of alcohol.

The headlights of other cars shined through the back window,
As people drove by with shocked looks upon their faces with no idea what was going on.

It was a shock to see such young adults,
That drank until they could no longer control themselves.
Such young adults that would never know what happened,
Because they all ended up dying from the sudden car crash that could have been avoided,
Had the six teenagers not been drinking.

The question appeared in many minds of others,
Was it an accident or was it murder?
It was murder.
A murder of six people, who were clueless.
Six people who could be alive today and experience what life could have held for them,
But now lay beneath the ground in a place called heaven.

*Written for a contest*
-Not a real story.-

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  • 16 years ago

    by BREEawNUHH

    Oh, wow. This was amazing. I liked how it was more story-like, but it was still poetic. It's a terribly sad piece. But I loved it completely.

    "Shatter.
    The sound of broken glass."

    ^^ This was probably my favourite part of the piece, because it was so simple, yet told the reader so much.

    Overall; I loved it. It was written perfectly, not a flaw to be found. 5/5

    -Briana

  • 16 years ago

    by kate

    Wow this is sad but yet in a way beautiful message you have here. In a way reminded me of a guy who passed away because he was under the influence of alochol and he hit a tree and flew out his windsheld he died probably 10 minutes or a little while after that in the ambulance.

    keep it up.
    keep on writing.
    love always and forever.

  • 16 years ago

    by Goodbye

    I picked this poem because the title was fascinating me too much. *smiles*

    From this poem I made a conclusion the poet is intelligent person and she is capable to think by her own brain. This is a compliment. I mean MOST of people...I would not say so. They never bother their head for a second.

    Yes, this story is not real one, but it could be...maybe less dramadic one...but still.. I have always thought that alcohol has more bad than good influence for people's behaving. You can disagree with me but I have made this conclusion in during 7 years period of time. I observed my old classmates when we were 15...and since then.. Well... *shakes her head*

    I think this poem was like a good warning...example care what could happen. Unresponsible behaving always leads to risk having problems...

    Well done!

  • 16 years ago

    by PoetryKnight

    Ashes to ashes
    and dust to dust
    A world full of sin,
    Betrayal, and lust

  • 16 years ago

    by Spirit

    Ouch
    well that was a tad bit harsh
    True you got your true feeling out
    and about so that's good

    I really like this poem
    even though it is clearly not true
    you expressed your thoughts so easliy
    it was inspiring

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