Comments : You've changed me

  • 16 years ago

    by Dark Secrets

    Nice poem.... keep writing.
    My favourite part is this:
    You also helped me arrange the pieces of my heart.
    That were once, Blown apart.

  • 16 years ago

    by Waiting4mywings2heal

    This is really good it has a nice flow to it. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    The poem flows straight from yhe heart

  • 16 years ago

    by Weeping Wolf

    Once again, very sweet. maybe you could do a poem about one specific moment togeter, happy,sad, whatever to give us the essence of how special yor love is:)

  • 16 years ago

    by SoUrNameIsTia

    Another awsome poem! =] this was my fav part:

    Even though I have lied to you twice.
    If I could go back,
    I would change it for my life.

    5/5

    ~tia

  • 16 years ago

    by Wake Me Up

    Whenever I think about how we met,
    I think about everything and get upset.
    I never meant to treat you that way,
    I didn't even know you were the one,
    until that one special day.
    ^^^
    This was a great way to start the poem. It grabbed my attention almost instantly.
    I really liked the flow of the rhymes too.

    Thank god for kili,
    she saved my life.
    Even till this very day,
    I'm patiently waiting to be your wife.
    ^^^
    the way this stanza was arranged threw me off, as in you went from rhymes to no rhymes. And i didn't understand the first two lines to much. But then after awhile i realized it was someone important in your life, most likely

    Even though I have lied to you twice.
    If I could go back,
    I would change it for my life.
    ^^^
    I was looking for 4 lines, but i liked these 3 lines all the same. They flow together very well.

    After that,
    I changed my ways,.
    You have made me better,
    And that's one thing,
    that will never change.
    ^^^
    again you changed how my lines were in the stanza. but it works for this poem.
    i can really feel the emotion in this stanza.

    You also helped me arrange the pieces of my heart.
    That were once, Blown apart.
    ^^^
    These we my favorite lines. They flow for beautifully. I could really feel the emotion here too.

    So now you have healed me,
    My heart is filled with so much joy.
    I never knew it would be,
    Because of one special boy.
    ^^^
    This stanza had a really unique flow to it that i loved. in these bottom stanzas,....once again i can really feel the emotion.

    So now every time I see you,.
    My heart skips a beat,
    I never knew I could have a feeling,
    In my heart, This deep.
    ^^^
    I really like how you didn't stop at...my heart skips a beat...you went into depth. I don't see many writers do that here.

    So thanks to you my world is together again.
    We will be together,
    forever,
    until the very end,
    you as my love and my best friend.
    I love you
    ^^^
    This was an excellent way to end the poem.
    This was another favorite stanza of mine too.
    I really want to see more of your work.

  • 16 years ago

    by linderrrxo

    That was really good you are a great writer you should put some new ones on really soon i cant wait to read more keep it up 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by grace

    This is an outstanding first poem!! there is nothing i would change. it is very sweet and touching! great job!

    -rothy

  • 16 years ago

    by Crippled Wing

    Very good poem

  • 16 years ago

    by bekka

    Keep up the great work your doing just fine ^__^