This is a brilliant poem.

I loved the first stanza:
Her eyes are like a window,
but all you'll see is rain.
Once in awhile lightning strikes,
and she'll show a hint of pain.

the imagery is so vivid, and i can feel the emotions she suppressed, and when she let go.

8/5.

I really like this one.

I really like this one.

This wasn't really my cup of tea-
at times it seemed a tad cliche and forced
and then at other times it was perfect.

Example-
It opened with a nice metaphor,
eyes like a window, rain=tears etc.
But then the 2nd and 3rd stanza brought it down,
until you hit the 4th stanza and again its nicely done!
Maybe try revise over and pick out the best bits,
then rewrite/rephrase the parts which seem to drag the poem down.

(: