"As I close my eyes thoughts of you overwhelm me,
I wish they'd disappear, so I no longer ache with want.
I know you'd never fall in love for the type I am.
Please stop being so wonderful, because I am dying."
-Wow. I'm amazed. This is wonderfully written. I've been going through this same feeling lately.. and it just won't go away.

Perfect poem. Perfectly written. Honestly. :] The lines were nearly the same length . . . Which is really good. It's one of those habits that a good poet should get into. Im guessing you did something with the syllable count or something to make the poem as neat as you did. I have troubles with making my lines the same length,a nd not making them too long, but you did a great job here making them the same length.. and not various lengths.. you made the poem flow really nicely because your lines were the same length. which is excellent. ahh, that made no sense. :) so ill stop now, 5/5

This poem has convinced me to add you to my favorites!!!!! =]
I think you deffinately captured the want you have for this special someone
"As I close my eyes thoughts of you overwhelm me,
I wish they'd disappear, so I no longer ache with want.
I know you'd never fall in love for the type I am.
Please stop being so wonderful, because I am dying."

^i loved that stanza...i can really relate and i couldnt have said it in better words of my own...this is strong and rightly gets a 5/5 from me...This poem breaths excellence!!!!
I like how your lines are long but still have a brilliant flow...simply fantastic

First of all I just want to say that I LOVED the ending. Pow! [: Again, this is well written, fluid, full of raw emotion, and (gasp) relatable. I myself have had this narrative in my head before, and I know many other people have to. You have a knack for love poetry that is so sincere and sweet.

Good job!

Ah, now this one -- this one is beautiful. But for some reason, I thought it should be "stand with me" instead of "within me." But then you speak of being haunted by the spirit ... so I guess that makes more sense. I don't know, sort of lost at the choice of word, but either way, I adored this piece.

It portrays less imagery compared to your other pieces, but it's so straightforward yet so deep all the same. You speak the words that often showcases the cliches that I tend to abhor, but you do it in a sort of ... subtly magical way that it doesn't irk me to the point of insanity.

The way you ended was absolutely striking. It's a beautiful concept -- a portrayal of a lost person waiting in the same spot for an old memory to return. That's how I saw it anyway.

Beautifully done .
..__MiNDYY

The flow is flawless as all of your poems have been that I have read this ne is especially romantic and reflects a gret dealof passionate desire
I enjoyed reading this one very much

Another strong and emotinal poem and I love the title "Standing up right for you" That's was just the cherry on top of the Ice-Cream Sundae.

The flowed was okay too, it was just a touch off in the second stanza, but other than that Great Work 5/5