Comments : Lust(Senryu)

  • 16 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    ^A girl that settles
    for lust instead of love will
    lose more than her pride ^

    Insightful message but again, the second line reads like an incomplete sentence where you force the syllable count putting will at the end of the line.....

  • 16 years ago

    by Invited

    That is very true, Ingrid, i hope many people see at this way. Well done!