Wow-very twilight-very good.
nice style there-you have a lotof different styles in you poems-well in the few that ive read-i like that. bit of variety.
id like to know what u think of my poem "set me free", would you take a look? its also about a vampire. but not twilight per se.

anyway-back to you :P once again i give you a 5/5
aish