Drifting Down

by coverd in darkness   Jun 16, 2008


Thought you were my sun,
When the skies were painted grey,
Thought you were my escape,
When the pain wouldn't go away,
Thought you were my wind,
When i needed fresh air,
Thought you were my ocean,
When i needed to be free,
Thought you were my friend,
Here til the end,
Thought you were here for me,
Through the thick and thin,
Thought i could call you anytime,
I needed to talk,
Thought i could rely on you,
Like you told me to.

So now I'm sick,
Your not here,
Need you the most,
Yet you've disappeared,
Far away from me,
Wish you could see,
You're destroying me deeper,
As a battle this illness,
You were the one,
Who made me get treated,
Wanted to know I'd survive,
Guess that was all fake,
Haven't heard from you in days.

So won't you come back,
Take this pain from me,
Why won't you tell me,
Everything will be okay,
Tell me to hang onto what i have,
Let that get you through,
Hold me close and say i love you,
So here i wondering,
Do you still acre for me,
Or am i just part of your history now,
After everything we'd been through,
Still we stayed close
Until now... you've drifted down.

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  • 15 years ago

    by Not Enough

    Amazing... 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Sora

    This poem was beautiful. it held so much emotion and meaning. a great flow and very expressive. i loved every word. job well done. keep it up! 5/5.

    -Ashlei.

  • 16 years ago

    by claire

    I think this starts out really well, but then the first verse's rhyme sequence changes . . the second verse starts out well too, the line "as a battle this illness" doesnt really seem to fit. the third verse could flow better . . basically i'd say my overall suggestion is to rhyme if you're going to rhyme. cause this spontaneous going back and forth isnt working so well. now that i've said all of the negative, i love the first verse, and the whole thing has a ton of great lines throughout it. hope my suggestions did more good than harm - i really dont want to hurt anyone's feelings, just give my honest opinion
    ~Claire