There would not be any need to make this poem longer, because the theme comes across directly at the end quite well. I could easily pick up on the imagery in this poem also which I thought was great. Very nice!

Nice description, I wanna pass out

Short...and good write...
In these few words u captured so much sadness...

just one suggestion... make the starting of each line capital...

I loved the title..

keep writing...

This was really good. It was short, but you explained what you needed to get across, which is always good. Of course. I would capitolize your I's at the beginning of every stanza though, beacuse then it's neater. This poem flowed really nicely, but you could also add some more and use some more descriptive words maybe? I know it's hard, but challenge yourself. XD 5/5

Spmetimes i feel like this...5/5