This is quite good so far, however.. I would expect more from you with such a title as "Smile." I think you could expand on this much more. Good start though 5/5

Being more specific would help the image :)

Hey, I thought this was great, very unique, I haven't read many poems on this subject.
I think it is good the way it is, not to short or anything. Sometimes you can express everything you want to say in few words, and it is still a wonderful piece. Nice work!!!