Comments : Don't Try

  • 16 years ago

    by steph

    This is a good poem...ur very talented writing poetry..

  • 16 years ago

    by CalGirl

    Wow...
    this totally reminds me of myself...

    just yesterday i was crying over my love (its been 3 years yet he doesn't know) and how i thought i had gotten my happy ending, but i didn't.

    Don't try to dry my tears
    If your the reason i am crying

    [this is so me. i did this just yesterday. it makes me so sad just to think about him now. but i'll have to learn the hard way i guess, cuz i still think i'd be glad if he cared enough to dry my tears even if they were because of him...]

    Don't try to hold my hand
    If you don't want to hold on

    [yeah, i agree with this. i don't want to fall into love with someone who doesn't care. and i totally agree with you. this is a different situation with the first stanza cuz i'm not breaking down and i don't need a shoulder to cry on... i know it sounds ironic but that's just how i feel...] =)

    Don't try make me smile
    If you plan on making me frown

    [agreed. although i don't think kyle would ever do this to me, he might incidentally. i don't want to dig myself into a deeper pit than i already am right now...]

    Don't give me a hug
    If you don't want to stay together

    [haha... too true too true... but the only time i've hugged him was when everyone was hugging each other after the graduation dance so i hugged him good-bye... i think he was meaning to hug me, but i did it before he could scare himself out of it.]

    Don't kiss me in the rain
    If the rain will be my tears

    [oh my god. my fav stanza. of course, this is totally how i feel... (right now i feel really pathetic cuz i can empathize with everything you're talking about, every symptom of suffering in love...]

    Don't let me fall for you
    If your going to let me crash and burn

    [the best. i don't know which one is better, or which stanza describes me more, but this one and the one before it is the best writing i've seen in a while now. i can't believe i'm empathizing with almost everything ur saying... its almost like u've been thru it all the same...]

    i love ur writing joc, keep it up k?

    and whatever made u write this remember that you have friends you can talk to, even if california! (me)

    so keep it up and pm me with updates k?

    ~Sophie~

  • 16 years ago

    by msluckyone

    Nicely expressed !