by forevertobeart Jun 16, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
about depression
In a faraway and distant dream |
by The Prince
I think the form could be tidied up a bit, it doesn't appear as a good looking poem on it's own, but then again, words speak more. |
I like this poem it showed alot of great emotion, and your vocabulary was great. |
by Cyber Saiyan
In a faraway and distant dream |
Wow!! Your such an avid writer!!...Good Job its very sad tho but thats how some people perceive this point of view...5/5 |
Another great write from you. The emotions captured are strong, raw, and genuine. I really appreciate the unique point of view this poem had, and loved the last stanza. The ending line is marvelous. The only thing that threw me off a little was the "Falling" tagged on the end of the fourth stanza. To me, it would be better not attached -- just in it's own line: to be abrupt and powerful; as fits the rest of the poem. Just my opinion though! |