Sweet love

Well thanks for helping me with my changes but some times i realy don't have anyone in my house that realy listen to me ...... in other words iam on my oun so ..... so sharring some poems with them is hard becaues they dont kare about them ...... so ya if you could help me that would be great!

Okay first a few small corrections:
-the way you used it, "except" should be changed to "accept" and your should be changed to "you're". also, you dont need all those "..."'s, they just get tiresome, like you're murmuring it as you're dying . . basically they take the life out of it. the actually ideas are great, but you could make it sound better - i would try
"my parents don't accept you
But i love you so much
I will fight until they do
And if they don't
Its still Ok
I will always love you
Anyway" i mean it doesnt have to rhyme but i think what i just suggested wouldn't hurt. on the bright side, this poem is heartfelt and full of deep ideas :) keep writing!