Even though, i
have let you down in the past.
I shouldn't have to,
live my life in a cast.
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I like how you express your feelings, but i think you should have started your poemin a diffrent way it seems as if you just jumped in to the poem.
i know that i have
done a lot of crap.
but, that still doesn't mean
that i have to act like a sap.
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I really like the way you used crap and sap. it was very cute.
knowing that you
still love me, is exhilarating!
to me it is almost,
overwhelming.
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I like how you set this up. but exhilarating and overwhelming dont really ryme.
even though, many
times i mess up.
I am glad you,
have not given up.
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This is great its my favorite part is shows how much you really care about this person.
To me you are
just wonderful!
you make my life
so colorful!
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I like the feeling u creat in these stanzas.
i love you, and
always will.
just know it will
always be real!
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this poem is a great heart felt poem. i enjoyed reading it very much.
This is how i think you shoukld have placed your stanzas.
I agree with the first comment
that maybe you should
have started with something a bit more detailed
in order to get into your poem,
but its just a suggestion
and is up to you.
Either way, I thought that it was a great poem
with a lot of feeling put into it.
WEll done, Keep up the good work!!
***Take Care***