Ooo baby this one is hot! You can totally see and feel this poem...You use good imagery and the 5 senses well ... i thought it was well written and thought and i liked the comparison of the lips to the ocean and waves that was my favorite part =]...the end added a good touch to it amazing job i loved this poem =]

5/5

Amazing poem. I love the thought behind it. I think you'll be an excellent writer. If you get your book published send me a pm because i'd love to read it. Your poetry is filled with exquisite imagery.

Crashing like a tidal wave our lips collide like rocks and water.
Breaking into a cool mellow tide, barely grasping the sand.

I love these lines the metaphores and similes are perfect for this poem. Terrific job (5/5)

Aahhh. I adore the way you wrote this. This piece is incredibly well penned. It had me intrigued from the very first line, and just got better. The fluidity was practically perfect, and your use of words was simple, yet brilliant. "tickling breeze" I love that! The metaphors and imagery you used was truly beautiful. A sincere poem, that oozes longing and romance.

Loved it!
Smiles,
N*

This was an extremely refreshing read. From the title, I was praying, "Please don't let this be another cliche." But it was absolutely beautiful.

I felt like you used "like" to compare things way too often, and it sort of took away from the piece, but nonetheless, it was still amazing.

The imagery was absolutely stunning. The beautiful pictures that my thoughts drew up were breathtaking, and your words created that. And I really thought you were talking about someone who was already there -- maybe an old love or something -- but then that little twist in the end, where you're asking for the boy just made me jump out of my seat, like WHAT?

Loved it.
..__MiNDYY

You have command of the free verse flow that I aways envy. The imagery is awesome in this passionate sensual poem. I really can't find anything to critisize here. I am extremely impressed
5>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>>

Very well written and very very nice imagery!

And the emotion was very much implied towards end, FABULOUS!

But the ending along with the poem was very well put together, so well that I forgot that it didn't rhyme

Usually with poems that don't rhyme I get bored but not this one ;)

Great Piece 5/5

Excellent use of words, beautifully written...5/5 hey can you do me a favor and vote honestly on my new poem called picture perfect thanksssss

I loved this poem. It shows the readers what love can be like and opens my eyes to the possibilities.
There is one thing that I think would help the poem a little. Try not to use the word love so often. Try to find other words to take its place.
Other then that it was a great poem.
5/5 :)

OMG I Love It..What I Love Most Was Yur Choice Of Words It Really Pulled Me In
Great Job
Keep It Up

That was very cute. Nice descriptions. It seemed to flow good.
Alot of things I could piture form your descriptions

Good job