I have to agree with miss take.It kinda reminds me of mii grandma..and also mii brother just died soo.you know.I thought about him until it said bloved.Nicely done.keep up the good work!

Ooo it was good, but the end was a shock. Based on my beliefs god doesn't do stuff like that. But that's just me. It was a good poem though. And the ending was such a surprise! Way to go! :)

Four out of five.

This was very good. I really like the meaning behind it. It was sweet. Good job.

This is my new favorite poem!! very good detail, and the emotions were expressed so well! keep up the wonderful workk!!

Omg tats a really great poem i neva seen such a emotional poem like tat keep tat up and one day u could turn to someone great.. oh thanks for commenting on my poem... keep it up cause ur poems are wonderful and great to read hope to see more poems from ya and now i have become a fan on ur poems
Thanks Tami oxo

Oh my gosh that was really touching
and so beautifully written.
The flow was great,
You have a stunning style
keep up the good work
and take care!!!

I rele love it!!
its pretty awesome..! =D
keep it up >.<

<3

Hi there,

You asked me to look at your poems and so I will. There is not much to correct, only a few irregularities in the past and present tense being mixed. I will change that now and then you can compare it to your original poem alright?

Take care, Ingrid

Saw him standing beside the grave
Beneath the earth his loved one lay
Emotions erupted in running tears
Grief and sorrow was his pray.

He came to meet his dear beloved
Was used to meeting her every day
He knew she loved the scent of tulips
Brought and placed it on her grave.

He would stay there and talk for long
He knew she listened to whatever he said
Would open his heart and kiss her name
Written with R.I.P on her grave.

People would call him crazy and mad
But in his heart he was grieved and sad
For hours he would stay there and talk for long
�Dear I miss you!� He would say.

^^^^I don't know what you meant to say here!

Years passed, but still the same
As usual he brought a tulip one day
Tears trickled, placed his head on the grave
Prayed to God, for meeting her again.

God was watching him from the heavens
His wish was granted, and was blessed that day
God ordered the angels to take out his soul
And thus he met his beloved this way.

A vary sad poem Iliked it 5/5

A well written poem. There are a few errors that I think should be corrected but other than that I believe that this is a very expressive write filled with so much of emotions, and though it displays so much pain, it also declares that true love lives on forever.

"Was used to meet her every day" - I think that is should rather be : was used to meeting her every day.

"Prayed to God, for meeting her again." - I think that it should rather say: ... to meet her again.

None the less I enjoyed this poem alot. The flow added to the depth of sorrow. 5/5 from me.

I was thinking the title a lot...."when someone leaves forever".. Is that so...? Do people leave forever...and where do they leave?

The poem...created an image about a man...standing in graveyard... Somehow I imaged...it is spring... maybe it came about the tulips... Spring flowers..

A man talking to his dead love...prayed their souls to meet again...

And then...God takes his soul in heaven...

Yes...feelings don't die...even our body will die.. And love...just a great power...

I see this poem very beautiful... I think...when I will die one day... I would like...someone would feel this way to me...

This beautiful sad poem...made me really think...

Expressive!!..That was really sad and deep..U got a great talent plz keep it up:)...good job5/5
Take care and thx fr the comment...

OMG its so Expressive... i really loved this poem..
i'm sry for your lost if you lost someone..
but really its more than 5/5..
gr8 job..

This was amazing, how sweet a love like that would be You captured the meaning of love and the feeling of forever. Excellent poem, my eyes are wet with tears, you pulled on the heart strings with this one.
The structure and flow I found excellent

Muhamad you have taken a sad poem and turned it into a work of beauty I am very impressed well worth 5/5

Wow. There's so much passion in it.. It was really sad but I loved it. It was so good. And your words really swayed.

I can honestly say that so far, this is one of my favorite poems. It has a lot of emotion, and i can feel it...

good job :)

Wow 5/5 =]
first I must say thankyou for liking my poem and the comment for it.

Wow this was very deep and the way it flows is amazing. I can relate to this thanku for telling me to read it . It really means a lot to read something with a meaning for me even I though I did not te this. beautiful work and the very nice ending.

Omg! soo sad!
its so sniffy...
but i loved it!! :)

xo

Nice work!
worth readin, as if it's really from the heart?!
make more