Voice In The Distance.

by Courageous Dreamer   Jun 18, 2008


There's this distinct voice in the distance.
It speaks to me everyday.
The more it speaks, the clearer it gets.
The clear it gets, the more it makes sense.
This voice gives me the advice I need,
The kind I need to keep strong-
to hang on no matter what may happen.

"If you want something so bad,
you have to fight for it.
It isn't just going to come easy."
Over and over again, day by day,
These words enter my mind.
I realize, this is all I can do.

So, I just keep holding on;
I can't let those feelings of you go.
If I let go, all these feelings will fall apart,
I will no longer have them in me,
I won't feel them anymore.
I can't totally forget about you,
I just don't think I can.

"Just remember, everything happens for a reason.
So what happens, happened for a reason.
You have to face the facts, and move on with your life no matter what."

This voice in the distance tells me,
Just take the risk, fall for him.
Get everything over with, because in the end,
You won't regret it, because you tried.
It happened for a reason, and you will know that reason when everything is over with.

"Trust me, you'll regret it.
So just give it your best shot."

This voice repeats over and over,
I can't get it out of my head, It's stuck there.
So from now on, I'm going to give it my best shot.
I'm giving it everything I have.
If it doesn't work out, then I won't feel bad.
I won't have to feel that feeling of regret.

This voice will never leave my head,
At least not until I give it a try.

*-Written for a contest a while ago.-*

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  • 16 years ago

    by BREEawNUHH

    Hm. I liked this a lot.

    "There's this distinct voice in the distance.
    It speaks to me everyday.
    And the more it speaks, the more clearer it gets.
    The more clearer it gets, and the more it makes sense.
    This voice gives me the advice I need,
    The kind-of advice I need to keep strong and hang on no matter what may happen."

    ^^ Okay. "..the more clearer it gets." <--- This should read one of two ways, I believe -- "..the more clear it gets.." or "..the clearer it gets.." Both "more" and "clearer" are not needed together.

    ["If you want something so bad, you have to fight for it. It isn't just going to come easy."]

    ^^ I loved these lines here. It's completely true.

    "So, I just keep holding on,
    Because I can't let those feelings of you go.
    If I let go, all these feelings will fall apart,
    I will no longer have them in me, and I won't feel them anymore. "

    ^^ The second & third line -- I don't like the repetition here. It's good, I just think it could be reworded so as not to directly repeat.

    Overall; I liked this. Not as much as some of your other work, but this is good. The word choice was alright, but it could have been better. 4/5

    -Briana

  • 16 years ago

    by Robin Auger

    I don't quite get what this poem is about. Ican't tell if you are listening to the good voice or the bad one. I dont know. Sometimes I mis-interpret poems. But, your rhyming skill was awesome. so 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Ashley

    I enjoyed reading this. I agree you do have to give everything you have to make it work. Just give it your best shot and go with the flow.

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenny M

    This is a really nice poem, when reading it I wondered if the voice was meant to be a person? Perhaps I person you (or the voice in the poem) had lost? Or whether like another poster is was just a voice of the person who was thinking it. Either way it doesnt matter, I dont think it needs to be clarified or anything like that, just a thought I had when I was reading it.
    Hope it did well in the contest! Xx

  • 16 years ago

    by Dawn aka Dominique

    I understand I hear the voice too. I think they call it a "Conscience" Ha Ha Ha Great work

    Couldn't find or Remember any Negative
    5/5

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