Dungeon

Omg..dis is just so awsm...absolute burst of emotions..love it...5/5

Well this poem certainly proved worth my time!
very powerful and descriptive stuff. this poem held alot of meaning and thoughts that even I myself have had.
love this poem 5*

WOW! I really like this one! Its so affetionate and so creative! Excellent!

Behind her four walls she sits and she waits
When she built up her walls she left out her gates
Inside her four walls she sits and she cries
Wondering how hard the walls are to climb

^^I can't get over how much talent and beauty is in this piece...I also love the depth of the stanza in this part!^^ Love it!

Yes she knows she could never escape
Behind her four walls pain is her fate
She waiting for someone to come save her soul
To save her from the self she's become in this hole

^^This stanza really shows your creativity and you can just feel your emotions pooring out^^

She sits in her dungeon, she's waiting for you
Waiting to see just what you will do
How far will you go to help her break free?
Will you climb her walls however high they may be?

^^Beautiful...simply beautiful...I find this line very original...but you add your own touch of uniqueness to it:)^^

Her walls are not there to keep you away
She put up her walls to test out your strength
She built her walls for you to climb
So you can prove you're worth her time?

^^Lovely ending...absolutly lovely darling.. I really like this piece...your profile says that you want advice...but I have nothing to criticize...my only advice is to keep writing because you are very talented..and are gifted with extremely excellent word choice! Great job girl! 92494237487/5