Nice poem.5/5
**harlea

Wonderful! It is so refreshing to read poetry with new ways of mixing words, creating imagery, and telling stories. The first stanza was my favorite. The flow was a bit rocky, but it kind of fit the piece in a weird way. Your work is unique and good and I'm off to read more! =J

Write on,
Novalyn

Cruising through sentences
punctuating life
The sun flippantly waves
through the canopy of leaves
like the rapid succession
of turning pages
^ great comparison! it really paints a picture in the readers mind!

Dollops of clouds
scooped in upturned conifers
topped by nests of
humming birds that flitter through
in a dizzy haze of random alphabets
^^ I love the words you choose for this stanza. It read smoothly and really got your point across.

Gurgling sounds beneath
those south seas of hate
arose bubbles that danced
alongside her ear
and frittered in circles
meeting the dark engulfing locks
that tantalized men in their sleep
^^huh..interesting..

The cuckoo roared a different tune
and the lion purred
as she walked dry leaves
and step by step
his kisses haunting her
^^ok ok i am starting to pull things together here !

She jumped into the endless
off the cliff
into inviting deeper emerald seas
As the ruby on her neck matched the blood splattered
before she could touch the ground
for ravens and birds of prey
pecked her as she fell
as she gave away.
^^ I loved how you made the last two lines rhyme!!! it really added something and pulled the poem together.

Only suggestion: add punctuation. I would help make you're thoughts more complete. Other than that great job! 5/5