by ghosts in bloom Jun 18, 2008
category :
Nature, environment /
nature
The sun sighs his accomplishments; soft light folding over trees, |
Stunning imagery with good rhymes. |
by Rachel RTVW
I like the word choice in this piece although you used "the" way too many times. It is interesting and thought provoking. Too many filler words and if you modify just a bit, this poem will be excellent! |
by Nix
First of all I want to say something which I think about each stanza. Your rhyming is spectacular. It amazed me, truly, very very refreshing choice of rhymes, and it doesn't seem forced at all. |
This poem is very well written. Very poetic. The rhyming was extremely amazing.. and was not forced at all.. which was great, because I think a lot of people think rhyming is really cool, use it, and it doesn't work very well.. The flow was great, because of how great your rhyming was. The imagery was amazing and beautiful. Great work. I enjoyed this piece. 5/5. |
by Edward D Zurovec
Astounding work young Lady! One of the best Poems I have ever read, touching deeply My beliefs to move on Day to Day. Nature plays, us in our endless cycle of rejuvenation. Without the Sunlight,trees, grass,singing Crickets,soft Moonlight to enlighten dreams, what a boring Life we would lead. I enjoyed the awareness of your well written imagery and subtle Metaphors to bring it all together. For there --- in between the ins and outs, I find proclivity to begin again. Beautiful work, Peace and Blessings |