Nice words..sweet and cute..really enjoyable! Good work!

Haha i see it went to the original beat of ####### ####### little star =]
the flow was a bit off but it was cute and a great write

This was really different, unique, which I liked a lot. It was difficult to take out any precise emotions from this piece, because I think there was a mixture of them there. Overall, it was a magical piece. It made me feel happy. I'm not sure if that was your intention for the readers, but that's how I felt anyway.

Good job. :]

Very nice LR! for a few years my son wanted to become an astronomist and made me look through his telescope every night:) Ever since, I have loved the galaxy!

Take care,

Ingrid

Countless mysteries hidden so far
`I feel like "so" should be taken out. It seems unnecessary.

The syllabication was kind of shaky ... along with the flow. Some lines were too short opposed to the previous line, and it made reading it sort of rough. The words didn't flow as smoothly as I wished.

It's a unique way of writing, and you ended the piece extremely well -- I loved the ending. But the middle sort of ... left me disappointed slightly. The imagery is pretty, but you could do more with it, I feel.

..__MiNDYY

I really liked this poem a lot.. because it almost sounded like a more unique version of the original song "Twinkle Twinkle Little Star".. I thought the flow was pretty good and flowed the piece along nice and quickly. The word choice was extremely amazing. :] I was impressed. Great work. Thanks for your comment. 5/5.

This is a very beatiful poem with great imagery but I think their were a couple of errors

Like...

"Sparkling Dazzling little star
Ever wondered how distant they are!"

After that last line I think that should be a question mark instead of an exclamation point :\ I think

And..

"Nearest being the red-hot sun
Farthest is known to none
Million light years away
Images Hubble attempt to portray"

I think that second line should be
"Farthest is known to be no one"

Just check those over a little bit

but loved the topic and the poem was very well written

Great Work! 5/5

[: I like this piece! I've seen numerous people re-write 'Twinkle twinkle little star' but all the versions I've read have been blah to me. Until this one! The flow was a little rocky, but the vocab usage, imagery, and just overall tone was beautiful. I love the point of view its written from. My favorite stanza was:

"Betelguese, a giant residing
in Orion - at top presiding
Look for belt in the middle
Flowing beside is Erinadus river"

And I love the couplets you
through in as well. A refreshing
read indeed. Keep it coming!

Smiles,
N*

^
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"...through in as well."
Oops! I'm silly, I meant
"...threw in as well."

Teehee.

RL
This is a wonderful piece. Very unique

Twinkle twinkle little star
Countless mysteries hidden so far
With dusky billows they dance
Smiling at our ignorance

The universe holds so many mysteries still waiting to be discovered.

Twinkle twinkle little star
Dwelling in a place afar
Shimmering,glittering in the sky
Queries arise seeking reply.

looking up to the sky at the endless stars. So many things go through our minds. There has to be something else out there. We have also been blessed with the beauty of the endless sky and all it holds.
Excellent job!
((hugs))
Cindy

Ahaha.. great poem!!!
5/5

This poem is truly special. You wrote about the stars we see up in the sky and all the questions that can be asked about them. The rhymes were great, and so was the flow. Only the 5th stanza has some issues with the rhyming. Nice write 5/5

This is the first poem that i've read that is in all acuallity(sp) About the stars.

to me this poem is about the qusetions and answers in the world
what you have verses what you want

Even with the naming of one of the starz your poem hold the possibility of being read many different ways.

That is talent either way you look at it.

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Love

I love your word choice and the cleverness. It sounds good when read to the tune of twinkle twinkle little star. Beautifully done and on one of my favorite subjects!

Ohmygosh. This is fantastic. I really enjoyed it. Love the amazing wording you used, and how perfectly it actually flowed to the tune of twinkly twinkle little star.

Twinkling stars speak a lot in their wn silent language....

Who knows wat they have in store for us humans... sum say they control our luck n faith...

I love them cuz they r faraway yet they r d clsest to my soul, heart, eyes n mind....

Loved this poem..

Keep it up

Best wishz... Karan

Oooooooooh gave me chills.. this one really really made me smile.. i dont know why but it just made me smile like crazy.

excellent job.5/5