Wow hun you wrote that so wonderfully.
The emotion and the feelings were so good. It's like i could feel what the girl was feeling, and i could picture everything.
keep it up.
it was great.
a definite
5!

Is it really the hardest thing to do, just joshing with ya. I know you will miss him. I am sorry for your lost. Jonny will be missed by both of us.

This poem absolutely tore my heart out. Your structure and flow as excellent and even if it wasn't I was so lost in your words I would never have noticed..this is going into my favorites
5/5

Wow! you wrote this so brilliantly. i loved it.

I wait for the phone to ring
no one can understands my pain
at night you can hear my cry
my tears fall harder than the rain

i loved this stanza, especially the very last line. very beauitful poem! i can relate, i love the way you write. keep up the good work! =]

I deeply felt every line to the heart like a piercing needle, letting out my breath slowly. i can totally relate to your poem. i'm glad though that you have someone so special as him in your life to influence you positively. i only hope and wish the best for you guys no matter what you both go through. keep up the excellent work. loved it, loved it, loved it. i'd give you a 10 if i could lol.

I am sympathetic to the emotion behind this piece but as far as a poem goes it was cliche with many forced rhymes and filler words. The flow is off. I could say so much more but I don't want to take away from your expression of pain.

Wow, this is a very sad and emotional poem... I could feel your pain throughout the whole poem...
This is so true, it is the hardest thing to do...
Great poem!!
-Jazmin