Comments : Eternal Storm

  • 16 years ago

    by heather

    Very nice indeed. very visual..well done

  • 16 years ago

    by pceluvr4hapenes

    I RLLY like it
    keep ritin!! <3
    XD

  • 16 years ago

    by Amaranthine

    I have to say nice emotion and flow.
    this is one of my favorite poems.
    I luv this and keep writing =]

  • 16 years ago

    by Spoken Silence

    First of all, I love the title. "Eternal Storm" Something that lasts forever, I personally like it when it rains, or when it storms. the sound of the water, is so calming and peaceful to me. Just like the sound of a waterfall.

    "In the midst of storm is a battle unfurled,
    Listen closely and watch the story told in the swirl."

    Description, I like how your in a way hiding it. The sound of the wind, your using different words to describe it and not exactly saying up front to the reader what it is but silently telling us, so we think.

    "In the sky Lightning dances, in bright twisting streaks.
    Thunder roars right behind it, for Lightning it shrieks"

    Two of the most common things in a storm, put together with beautiful words. Great stanza.

    "While the tempest rages on, in great wars in the sky,
    Rain steadily beats, an opposing lullaby"

    As I said, rain so calming so peaceful, "Lullaby" just the perfect word to use to describe the rain.

    "Despite how they argue, always and forever,
    They go hand in hand. Eternally together."

    Loved the ending. Saying that the storm is such a fight, so many sounds and sights, yet no matter how many times they fight they will always come together and stay together "always and forever" as you put it. great poem. I'm glad I read this!