Hi , first i hope i am not rude critic , but i hope you make the poem , inparagraph little ones , because this is too much for the eye to handle , m,ake the eye afraid to read , and i hope you work more about the rhyming , of the poem , else , your expression is good !!

I love your poem. i remember waking up in the middle of the night and i couldnt get back to sleep and i had old memories running through my mind.