Ummmm firstly, you should make a line of these thingy**** to seperate the poem and the A/N( authors notes...

it seemed more of a story...a very sad story of coarse...The lines were pretty good but it just came together more of a story...

Thanks for telling me to check it out! it is really good! i loved itt! congrats!

Wow an amazing poem...no poem has to rhym just to let you kno, bcuz it's coming from yer very heart and soul =]

I suddenly appeared into a bleak, terrifying nightmare
I stumbled across a shattered mirror; I slowly looked into it and didn't even recognize my own reflection
When I closed my eyes, then open them once more rain started to pour down on me
Suddenly I began travel through a dark never-ending alley that appeared before my eyes
I continually cried out for help, but yet all I could hear my echo
I started to go through self-destruction, and felt so that my negative thoughts defeated over my hope

that's my favorite stanza!! and it is a wonderful poem/story. i lovedd it, and you should be proud of what you've written, it's beautiful!!

This was more of a story, than a poem. It was very descriptive and used a ton of imagery.. but I think that you should make it into more of a stanza-like format.. which would make it more like a poem.. Shorten up your lines.. and tada you have a poem. :] It's more of a story.. but if you want to keep it as a story.. just state it's a story.. because otherwise people will think it's a story and it shouldn't be posted here. =) Great work, 5/5