Comments : Like God (I Hate You...)

  • 16 years ago

    by BREEawNUHH

    Aw. I loved this. It was probably my favourite of the ones I've read from you.

    "But now I know better,
    God does not exist
    and I don't have to please him.
    So I hate you."

    ^^ I loved these lines so much. They're so honest.

    Matter of fact; this whole poem is just completely honest. It's written perfectly. I can find no flaws what-so-ever. Wonderful.

    5/5

    -Briana

  • 16 years ago

    by Dan Bloom

    Holy crap... this just gets more and more intense! I love it! I haven't read too many hate poems recently... but I loved it!

    My favorite part is the most intense part of course:

    But now I know better,
    God does not exist
    and I don't have to please him.
    So I hate you.
    I hate you for taking the one thing
    I was never willing to give...
    I hate you.

    ^^Wow! Haha. Very bold! I like it :)

    One thing at the end...

    My little hands reached up to you in awe,
    for you were like a god to me.
    You betrayed my trust
    and had my little hands wander...
    You were just like God...

    ^^ You say "You were like A god to me" in the second line and then the last line is "You were just like God..." You might want to make it parallel and make both the same thing like change the last line to "you were just like a God" or the second line to "You were like God to me" and leave the last untouched. That just makes it less "scatterbrained" for lack of a better term! I loved this poem though! Great write!! 5/5