by Nix Jun 20, 2008
category :
Life, society /
other
Injustice takes a photo of the world, |
"still those are progenies of our Czar Reindeer"- I think that you need a comma after STILL, it would create more powerful rhythm. You should put question mark at the end of the second stanza because you asked a question there with -can I?- |
by Sarah
ÙAs always.. well written and beautifully penned. Great talent 5/5 |