by Ash Jun 20, 2008
category :
Sadness, depression /
other
Lost in a life that knows only lies, |
A lovely dedication... |
by Lizaveta
I liked it. the main impression i got was that this state extraneous for you, for example you keep talking about people that create such atmosphere. and it feels that you have will to cope with the "world knows only lies". good job. |
The only thing about the ending is that the inner stanza rhyming throws off the timing it speeds up the pace other than that it is awsome 100/5 |