Marathon

Wow I love how you compare such a simple everyday thing to something as immense and overwhelming as life and maturing itself. I loved reading every word of this poem, keep writing! 5/5

I love the imagery in this poem, it actually feels like im running a marathon while im reading it
loved it
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Wow! I really like this piece! Its great to see someone write about something other than love and depression on here! I love it!

Sneakers pounding on the pavement,
Starting stretch- feet a little unsteady.
But taking off with eagerness,
May lack ability, but oh so ready.

^^This is a great opening because the reader is automatically drawn to it and just wants to keep reading. Thats awesome.^^

First milestone, lungs are heaving,
With striking yellow arms, clouds glare.
Path is slender, laden with rocks,
Weaving slowly in suffocating air.

^^I love the metaphors in this piece.. especially in this line. It takes a special talent to write like this and you def have it.^^

Strength is lost before growth occurs,
With nothing but will to keep going.
There's no plan to reach the end,
Yet those already there are knowing.

^^Wow...this is an amazing line...my favorite in this piece...it just keeps the reader thinking "whats going on"" lol its great^^

One foot in front of the other now,
Length means more than speed.
In the mass crowd of confusion,
The body learns what to need.

^^Wow love the stanza! I have nothing else to say about this line! I just love it! Haha^^

Cross the line with an energy burst.
It's temporary pain; subconsciously ignore it.
Growing up may be a marathon,
But we're all the better for it.

^^Oofta I never thought that a poem about a marathon could be so deep...but you did it! And you wrote it awesome! Its well-written and it has a lot of hidden messages. Great piece!