this was a very good and detailed poem. if u ever need a friend i'll be here.
morgan

This is probably m favorite poem from you now Sean. Great job. I don't even know where to analyze the poem. If you ever feel this way again though, call me up cuz i'm here for you.
Aken Sol

This is almost like a mad mans rant. Very surreal, dream- like and deep. You take the reader in and out of focus, maintaining structure and point. I really like this alot...and I'm convinced that your either really smart or completely nutz :p lol ...I'd choose the latter personally. Much more fun :)

Kevin

WOW. This is brilliant. i love your use of onomatopoeia at the beggining. xmollyxx