"In this world of black and white,
you're the only colour to my night.
You are the stars in all the skies,
and everything else that underlies."
^^ I adored this stanza, especially the second line. 'You're the colour to my night.' -- Ahh, gorgeous!
"In this world of sadness and heartbreak,
you are the reason for which I awake.
You're the smile on my face,
and the sparkle in my eye in this case."
^^ ...however, I wasn't so keen on this stanza, mostly because of the last line. '...in this case' is just so... unpoetic? It appeared like you were forcing a rhyme here.
"In this world of love and happiness,
our relationship is a beautiful mess.
You're the prince that'll take me away,
and together we'll forever stay."
^^ I loved the line 'Our relationship is a beautiful mess'. I'm quite the fan of oxymorons. Haha. I found the last line to be rather cliched, but despite that, it work with this. It's sweet.
"In this world of tragedy and hate,
we're each others soul mate.
You are everything good in my life,
and you take away all of my strife."
^^ I was rather indifferent to this stanza. It's beautiful, of course, but nothing about it screams "Wow, amazing!" unlike some things in the previous sentences.
"In this world of rainbows and butterflies,
there are no questions of who and why's.
You're heaven sent; it must be true,
because you're an angel, and I've fallen for you."
"In this world of black and white,
you're the only colour to my night."
`Very beautiful lines. I've heard something similar to these lines before, but I really like how you used them in this poem. It's a great beginning.
"In this world of sadness and heartbreak,
you are the reason for which I awake.
You're the smile on my face,
and the reason I'm happy in this place."
`Cute. I love the rhyme scheme, it's consistant. These lines are said pretty simply, but they are so beautiful and shows how much this person means to you.
"In this world of tragedy and hate,
we're each others soul mate."
`Soulmate is one word, I believe.
*I really love the repitition of "In this world of..." in this poem. It adds on to the wonderful flow you have going with the rhyme.
"You're heaven sent; it must be true,
because you're an angel, and I've fallen for you."
`Aww. <3 Very cute ending, really powerful and hits the reader hard.
Overall, a verrrry beautiful write. This person basically means everything to you. You did a excellent job expressing what this person means to you. Your most recent writes are definatly better, because you've improved. But this piece was beautiful. Great rhyme..It stays consistant throughout the entire write. 5/5 :)