It's Been One Day

"It's been one day
since you've left me here.
You've left me broken and alone
as I cry these tears."
`Simply written, but yet so well said. It sets a sad mood to the poem, because this person left you and now you are left with the broken heart and tears that don't end.

"It's been one week
and I'm still thinking about you.
I can see your blue eyes shine
and I can smell the scent you wore."
`I loved this! Each stanza shows that more time has passed and you tell exactly what you are feeling and what you remember. Like in this stanza, it's been a week and you still think about them and remember their beautiful blue eyes and the scent that you remembered them wearing.

"It's been one month
and you still cross my mind.
I always told myself
'he's the best I'll ever find'."
`Wonderful. So now a month has passed, and he's still on your mind. Great flow still. Outstanding.

"I've come to realize
you can't waste away.
Get out and do something
hope for a better day."
`This is so true. You shouldn't waste your time thinking about the past really. You should just get out and do something.. hopefully to get your mind off of them, and just hope for the better instead of the worst basically.

"Soon enough
I'll be with you once more.
It'll be the same
as it was once before."
`I really love how you still have optimism though, this guy didn't really break that from you. Instead, you still have it and hope that you can be with them again.

"But one day, my dear
happy we'll be again.
I'll dream about it
and I'll talk to you then."
`Beautiful. These last lines were really good actually. The rhyme was amazing.

Overall, a rather cliche poem.. but I know that you have improved immensly since this write, so I don't think there's anything you should change with this one. The poem is cliche, but does have a wonderful flow and rhyme to it. 5/5.

Aw i like this poem alot.. i like how you went from one day to one week to one month to one year.. it made the poem shine. i liked it alot. 5/5