The Small Difference Between Outerspace and a Kiss

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I haven't left any real comments on poems in a while, so bear with me. :P

Moonlit beach dream
walking hand in hand
water comes up to our feet
leaving footprints in the sand

^^ PUNCTUATION DANGIT! rofl. no, but really, the image was sweet. very very pretty, simple...and yet that perfect night kind of thing. lovely opening. :)

Moon light in the ocean
Light in your eyes too
you trip in the sand
I sit down next to you

^^ That's such a thing that you would notice: the eyes...this stanza was just very you. and i love how she trips in the sand...rofl. shocker.

I kiss you on the cheek
you pretend not to care
then you spin around and kiss me
starlight everywhere

^^ Fireworks much? Kaboom..wonderful stanza. definitely one of my favorites. it's simple and yet there are metaphors. PLUS you used one of my favorite words. ^.^

You roll onto me
My arms around your waist
stars are all around us
can't breath in outer space

^^ That last line is amazing. I know you don't like that word, but seriously, beautiful. It's so true. and it gave you the perfect title as well. Jesse!!!! GO back and edit though, pleeeeassee...punctuation...it's driving me nuts.

I whisper you "I love you"
you put your head on my chest
I whisper you "sweet dreams"
you close your eyes and rest

^^ That made me smile. Just very....lullaby ish, almost. this entire poem was like that, but especially this stanza. just sweet and innocent and superb.

You woke up the next morning
asked why you are on top of me
asked if we did anything
I sad we just fell asleep

^^ Rofl. That made me think of looking for alaska..that one line where he says he wants to sleep with her in the most innocent of terms. lol. once again, lovely.

You gave me a smile
cause u assumed what I knew you would
but don't you know, my dear
I'm too good for my own good

^^ That last line made me laugh...that's the kind of boyfriend any girl would want...the one who is too good for his or her own good. *nods* sweet sweet sweet. **I'm gonna puke..**

I kiss you good morning
now the poem is almost dead
but just because a dreams a dream
doesn't mean its only in your head

^^ wow, again, that last line is amazing, jesse. Just perfect, really.

Please go back and put in punctuation. pleeeeeassseeee!!! Sweet, simple, and loverly. Great job.