Hello
I am deeply thankfull to you that you have rated and made comments on my poem in the near past.
I have submitted my peom "Child Beggar Noshi",That i wrote when i was a Student of Civil Engineer,this is a real story of a Young Girl,and when i meet her,i was deeply grieved to see her condition.Kindly read my poem "Child Begger Noshi" and rate and Comment on it,to let me know,did it touched your heart or not
You won my heart by commenting on my poem....i am expecting that you do this favour again
Thanks alot
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You have some very good lines and images here and the feelings come through. I would suggest not concentrating on the rhyme so much that you sacrifice the meaning/what you really want to say.