Naturally

by Jim McMillen the man within   Jun 26, 2008


Naturally...........May 21st 2008

I,-------a leaf from a once mighty oak ,
Blowing to and fro , from the storms of life.
Until the gentle breeze that you are, lifted me,
Carrying me safely , to the solitude of your stillness.

YOU-------a weary traveler,
Endlessly striving to replenish , that which others depleted.
Until I became a pillow for you to rest your head securely upon,
And a blanket to warm you , until purpose softly whispers,-------come !

I-------a torrential rain,
Pouring down upon the mountain tops
Washing down, that which does not belong.
Back to its rightful place.

YOU-------The mountains majestic peak.
Guiding me through the crevices of your very being.
Giving me the power of momentum,
Flowing into the lakes of your valley, as you softly whisper-------stay!

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  • 14 years ago

    by Jess

    This Is An Amazing Poem.
    Dont Let ANYBODY tell You Diferently.
    I Loved It And Such Raw Emotion!
    Keep Writing, PLEASE?!?:)
    Im Going To Keep Reading Your Poems=D
    5/5
    It Would Be Great If You Could Comment And Rate My Last Poem? THANKS!

    Much Love, Jessi.

  • 14 years ago

    by Sunshine

    Always been that good
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    that this poem
    IS
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    5.5
    ur broken wing
    Rania

    keep writing

  • 16 years ago

    by Sumit Ojha

    Very meaningful and to the point. I like it very much!

  • 16 years ago

    by PassionCourageTriumph

    So deep yet you can still understand what it is that you are saying. I love this poem. It was quite pretty. Felt good to read. Rolled off the tongue nice. You are a great writer!
    ~Kayla

  • 16 years ago

    by JD

    And a blanket to warm you , until purpose softly whispers,-------come !

    Flowing into the lakes of your valley, as you softly whisper-------stay!

    ---
    those two lines are my favorite because to get to the very last word you have to follow that long line of dashes.
    somehow pausing right there, made this the best poem ive read in a long time.
    COME-STAY.
    im really not sure why i find that style so wonderful.
    also how both of those sentences have "softly whisper" in them.
    imagery is great.
    Yet another GREAT poem.
    5/5

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