Comments : Haiku #17

  • 16 years ago

    by Rob Matt

    This one has tons of emotion, but it dosent really have a plot

  • 16 years ago

    by Painted Persona

    Plot? Seriously? Heaven help us all...

    The silence lingers;
    begging to hear your whispers
    and slow, calm breathing.

    BEAUTIFUL!!! Just breathtaking. I think you've made me love this style. It's just beautiful, it's felt and the words capture each other...and slow, calm breathing...Gosh, it's just enveloping to the mind.
    I adore the simplicity in this, just the overall effect you give with these simple lines, it's warming, inviting, just brilliant.
    A fantastic opening to the poem...Wow. I love the whole 'silence' aspect, the desire that silence wants, what you've shown, Heavens it's enough to make to make you wish for silence just to hear the desire in it.
    Beautiful, beautiful poem...simple breathtaking!

    ~Samantha I CoZ This Pain
    On the WEEEEEEEEE side of life....