Silence

by Rachel   Jun 27, 2008


I used to pray for the world to go
To stop watching my every movement
So I suppose it's my fault I feel so low
With no hope of self-improvement

As I sit in the darkness listening but not hearing
The sounds of the people I pushed away
But also always really fearing
That they would come and see me this way

Their voices were always too loud
Too hard for me to truly cope
I would freak out in a crowd
Now I'm alone without a hope

The rushing silence is too much for me
And I'll end it anyway I'm able
Even if you don't agree
At least I can dream life is stable

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  • 15 years ago

    by Saving Grace

    This is good, again, youve done a good job at expressing yourself here. It flowed well and i found it was creative, and unique. It wasnt like all the other sad poems ya no?

    As I sit in the darkness listening but not hearing
    The sounds of the people I pushed away
    But also always really fearing
    That they would come and see me this way

    ^^ That stanza is the only one i would have to say could be worked on. Its intense and emotionals, BUT I just think the rhyme scheme in that stanza could be worked on.

    Thats just my opinion tho. But apart from that, well done. 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by ether

    I'm not usually a person that likes sad poems such as these, but this had a different edge to it. I like it.

  • 16 years ago

    by Searching for Guidance

    Nice flow; well written :) a true depic of a commonly felt emotion

  • 16 years ago

    by rich sanchez

    I think you did a nice job with the rhyme scheme! it was a pretty deep poem but i liked it. im here if u ever need any comments or critiquing or if u jus wanna chat. :-)

    p.s.- feel free to comment or critique any of my poems if u want to

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