Great poem, but it did made me stop in parts that i think i shouldn't have. over all it was well written. keep it up!

**Ada**
*aBSwaBHiaPL*

Well I like your other 2 poems better. But this one is good too. Anyway you have an error in your poem.

A boy that means more to you,
one that will make (always alright)
= Everything alright *I think it would sound better - and it will flow better too*

Keep up the good work.

Nice... good choice of words. keep up the good work. stay in touch and dont be a stranger. ^_^

Beautiful, 5/5. Em