Comments : A Moment Frozen In Time

  • 16 years ago

    by LoreNz0

    I have to say i really love this poem!
    not only coz it sets the scene and discribes it to the reader, nor that it is packed full of emotion and love, but because im trying to rite a poem now which has so much of the same elements in it as this does.

    you are definatly a good source of inspiration =D

  • 16 years ago

    by Ingrid

    Ah...true love..so obvious for us, the readers!
    Very sweet and tender love poem by you, Bassel:)

    Hugs,

    5/5 Ingrid

  • 16 years ago

    by Em

    I don't find words. It's amazing, I love it. You can rhyme in a way I would only dream of, and the emotion is...
    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Nee

    Wow what a beautiful piece you penned here.
    I love it to the depth of my heart, it felt sooo romantic and warm reading this poem.

    She walks in my direction
    Body trembling with affection
    Time does stop and her beauty does shine
    Something about this feeling is divine
    This stanza seriously blew me away, I could imagine the portrayal here, with every move of her coming close to you and you trembling with affection, that was an awesome metaphor.
    Last line was amazingly written !!

    Very well done and sweet romance =]
    Last lines were very great too, a long kiss, wow I'm feeling tempted already, hehe !

    write on
    I think I'm going to check oter poems by you =]
    Best of luck xx

  • 16 years ago

    by NoUr

    CUUUUUUUUUUUTE, LOVEY & VERY ROMANTIC POEM...definitly one of my fav

    oh oh!! i'm speechless...YOUR POEM made me speechless!!

    This is really an amazing poem, i felt all the feelings I may feel in a poem :D

    i totally felt the poem it was lovelyyyyyy

    On this hot summer day
    The trees swing and sway
    I take a deep breath of air
    Turn my head to see her stare

    ^^u should be very grateful to that hot summer day ;) nice entry btw, you made us wanna know wats next...

    Eyes lock instantly
    Familiar giggles come rapidly
    Coy face hides secretly
    Heart pounding loudly

    ^^hmmmmmmmmmmm :)...what can i say...hmmmmmmm:) that's love

    She walks in my direction
    Body trembling with affection
    Time does stop and her beauty does shine
    Something about this feeling is divine

    ^^the best part... i do believe that time DOES stop indeed in such moments... something!! EVERYTHING feels divine...okay so here she comes...still wanna know wats next...

    Before long she is here indeed
    And with a hug filled my every need
    She took a long daze into my eyes
    And together we let out long sighs

    ^^i'm speechless

    We are finally together, we are finally here
    Love flowing so true, pure and sincere
    Soon the world seizes to exist
    as we came together and for a long time kissed

    ^^FINALLY...& again hmmmmmmmmmm:)...

    wish you happiness in this relationship for ever, PLEASE keep writing, that was WOW!!

  • 16 years ago

    by Faithless

    Wow u realli move me.. u realli got my attention fro the start til the finish...great job