Oh my gosh.. you are really good at suspense poems..

this one is even better than the other one i read lol. i loved it.

and your ending is so strong! ...

i just love this poem to pieces!5/5

and i think i might add it to my favorites too.

Great Poem, Had The Best Images In My Head. Good Work =D

At fist i thought it was her boyfriend and she was going to kill him...but the way you made the reader think it was one thing and turn it around to be another is amazing.

this is a great poem and i love the way you use a lot of womans fears and made it into a dream.
great job
5/5

Hey :)
my account wont let me comment love poems sorry, so ill do 2 others instead :)

This is really good, its a scary story, i hope its not true :)
you did a really good job of telling the story, and rhyming it.
your rhyming is good, but a little cliche, thats really the only negative :)
it flows nicley too!
5/5
-Steph

An amazing piece full of great imagery. i saw it all in happening my mind as i read it. you tell the story very clearly with all the description and make the reader feel as though they're really there. there was only one thing about this poem that annoyed me. some of the rhyming seemed a bit forced, but otherwise it was an absolutely brilliant piece. i once again have to say that the imagery was fantastic, very vivid :)

5/5

Keep Writing, lovely
As Always,
~NinjaGirl~

Wow. This piece was so easy to follow and I could picture ever little thing that you explained so vividly. This poem is full of imagery and suspense in a way. I felt like I just couldn't stop reading. This piece was wonderful beacuse it was kind of told in story form, yet you managed to make it flow so perfectly. This piece was very well written. I love poems like this that are kind of like stories and are so suspenseful and you want to see what happens next. Like a really suspenseful movie or something. I loved this piece a lot, it was a really interesting read although the whole thing was sad. Very nicely done, hun. I was impressed! 5/5. (: