by NinjaGirl Jun 28, 2008
category :
Love, romance /
i love you
Reminiscence Part1: Remember When |
by Cody B
Good write, loved the emotion. I have a new poem posted finally...Read an comment would be appreciated! |
by Jyoti Rawat
It is such a heart touching. It touch my sould |
This was pretty sweet. I liked the imagery you created with lines such as: |
Wow, this poem was excellent. but, it lacks word-choice. it was pretty simple for me.. it flowed nice though.. so I guess I wouldn't change it too much. just pick up a thesarus and change a few words and make them more interesting I guess.... other than that, i think you did a good job. emotions were kind of there, but not extremely out there. maybe work with that as well. I guess I agree mostly with what blond genius said.. it is a okay poem, but it could be stronger! i know you can do it, im sure you have the potential. great work tho, 5/5 |
That was very sweet and touching. it shows the soft side of a boys heart. |